A bit too sadist for my taste, sorry. Since there's no background given, it's pretty much the desription of a demon having a meal. Maybe it would make more sense if we could read part 2 and get some insight on the people, or the reasons for the attack.
This sentence cought my eye:
"Look out" the Governor yelled as he saw what could only be described as foul and heinous erupted from the dense woods.
There's something wrong with that sentence. It should be "erupting", and I think there's a noun missing.
Nice vocabulary though, I had to look up several words.
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I hate how no one comments on the fan fictions.
This sentence cought my eye:
There's something wrong with that sentence. It should be "erupting", and I think there's a noun missing.
Nice vocabulary though, I had to look up several words.