Fan Fiction Title: Adflict, Lord of Torment Part/Chapter: 1 - 2 Score: 8/10 Review: The concept you've got started here is very interesting and already I'm being compelled by the new villain you're introducing here. Criton seems, thus far, somewhat two-dimensional, but I'm sure that will change with time. I also appreciate that you did not spare the child, as many authors would have felt compelled to. I am a big stickler for reality in fiction, and bad things do happen to good people in reality.
There's only two things I'm not liking so much; one is the inclusion of Tyrael as the force of 'good' bestowing Criton with his powers. I feel like Tyrael is a little overused within Diablo fanfiction and it might have been nice to see someone new. I do understand, though, that he is the one we are most familiar with. The other thing is simply that the installments could be a little longer. Right now you're including a lot of detail, which works, but the chapters seem inconsistently short with the amount of detail you're putting into them.
All in all though, a nice read. Looking forward to seeing where this goes.
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Part/Chapter: 1 - 2
Score: 8/10
Review: The concept you've got started here is very interesting and already I'm being compelled by the new villain you're introducing here. Criton seems, thus far, somewhat two-dimensional, but I'm sure that will change with time. I also appreciate that you did not spare the child, as many authors would have felt compelled to. I am a big stickler for reality in fiction, and bad things do happen to good people in reality.
There's only two things I'm not liking so much; one is the inclusion of Tyrael as the force of 'good' bestowing Criton with his powers. I feel like Tyrael is a little overused within Diablo fanfiction and it might have been nice to see someone new. I do understand, though, that he is the one we are most familiar with. The other thing is simply that the installments could be a little longer. Right now you're including a lot of detail, which works, but the chapters seem inconsistently short with the amount of detail you're putting into them.
All in all though, a nice read. Looking forward to seeing where this goes.