Quote from Siaynoq
I struggled with this a bit cause of the 1st person writing you chose to went with. And I know the Wizards are supposed to be cocky, but this character's disposition doesn't seem to change from that one bit.
I must admit I feel the same reading this again. I remember struggling with developing the wizards persona when writing it which was made harder by the fact that I was trying to do it from his eyes (first person view).
My main aim with this story was to practice writing an action/battle scene that had some flow to it as I had never done that before. It seems that I failed to give the reader anything to attach themselves to the wizard as he just comes across as an arrogant douche lol. In addition - I don't particularly like my battle scene writing in this story either but I did learn a lot from writing it.
Oh well - maybe I will try again with a chapter 2 where he inflicts pain on giant arachnids!
Thanks for the comments