GRAW.
Forgot to critique this here, I ended up ranting about it in a comment on the most recent community spotlight, though.
So I'm not just reading this now.
.. Anywho.
This is definitely one of the better short stories I've read.
Most try and fail at being deep, because there simply isn't enough time to effectively convey emotions, and leave an impact on the reader.
You however, threw that right out the window.
This really did leave an emotional impact on me, I found myself feeling sorry for Walter for quite some time after I had read it. Now, it didn't bend me out of shape and make me consider calling Walter up to console him, but for a time, I was really wondering what became of Walter, what his history with Clara was, and who the man was who took her from him.
I want to read more about him, but at the same time, I know that another installment may ruin the mystique for me. The ending was superb, making the reader draw their own conclusions was a good move, it takes that emotional connection already established (for myself, at least), and draws it into Walter's fate.
On one hand, I want him to actually have found Clara, and that by rest, you meant that he was able to finally put his sorrows to rest by way of being with her. But, on the other hand, I have a sinking (lolpun) feeling that he committed suicide, and by rest, you meant death.
Anywho, don't mean to sound like a kiss ass, but I'd give it a 10/10. Write more shit like this, it's fantastic.
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Forgot to critique this here, I ended up ranting about it in a comment on the most recent community spotlight, though.
So I'm not just reading this now.
.. Anywho.
This is definitely one of the better short stories I've read.
Most try and fail at being deep, because there simply isn't enough time to effectively convey emotions, and leave an impact on the reader.
You however, threw that right out the window.
This really did leave an emotional impact on me, I found myself feeling sorry for Walter for quite some time after I had read it. Now, it didn't bend me out of shape and make me consider calling Walter up to console him, but for a time, I was really wondering what became of Walter, what his history with Clara was, and who the man was who took her from him.
I want to read more about him, but at the same time, I know that another installment may ruin the mystique for me. The ending was superb, making the reader draw their own conclusions was a good move, it takes that emotional connection already established (for myself, at least), and draws it into Walter's fate.
On one hand, I want him to actually have found Clara, and that by rest, you meant that he was able to finally put his sorrows to rest by way of being with her. But, on the other hand, I have a sinking (lolpun) feeling that he committed suicide, and by rest, you meant death.
Anywho, don't mean to sound like a kiss ass, but I'd give it a 10/10. Write more shit like this, it's fantastic.