Fan Fiction Title: Adflict, Lord of Torment
Part/Chapter: 1 - 2
Score: 9/10
Review: For some reason, I was laughing when Tyreal gave some guy a choice of taking the crown (or something) and facing some evil no one wants to face or to decline and let the world suffer. It's how good is. They make someone else do the work. Let's face it. They're lazy angels who speak four thousand languages. HA!
Now to criticize it. That is, if I can find anything....
AHA!
Now what I don't understand (provided I read correctly) as to why the wife suffered a gory death, while the child just hovered over her father and was somehow killed. Maybe you could be descriptive again with the child's death like you were with the mother's. But apart from that interesting, and worth chewing my nails for the third chapter.
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One rule about me: If I'm going to tolerate your insanity, you will tolerate mine.
Almost all men can stand adversity. If you want to test a mans character, give him power.
You see what power is; holding someone else's fear in your hand and showing it to them.
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Part/Chapter: 1 - 2
Score: 9/10
Review: For some reason, I was laughing when Tyreal gave some guy a choice of taking the crown (or something) and facing some evil no one wants to face or to decline and let the world suffer. It's how good is. They make someone else do the work. Let's face it. They're lazy angels who speak four thousand languages. HA!
Now to criticize it. That is, if I can find anything....
AHA!
Now what I don't understand (provided I read correctly) as to why the wife suffered a gory death, while the child just hovered over her father and was somehow killed. Maybe you could be descriptive again with the child's death like you were with the mother's. But apart from that interesting, and worth chewing my nails for the third chapter.
One rule about me:
If I'm going to tolerate your insanity, you will tolerate mine.
Almost all men can stand adversity. If you want to test a mans character, give him power.
You see what power is; holding someone else's fear in your hand and showing it to them.