It's very good for a rough draft, I think the story so far has great potential. But how does selling poisons make the dad an alchemist? Alchemist's are alot more complex then just selling poisons and antidotes.
Okay, but what I'm saying is Alchemy isn't an occupation I think it's closer to a religion. They believe that everything evolves animals to humans..lead to gold stuff like that. As well they believe that everything has a "spirit" and all the objects on the earth's spirits are actually branches of the earth's spirit as well as the earth's spirit is I believe just a branch of the universe's spirit. Their ultimate goal is to find the Philosopher's Stone and The Elixir of Life.
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