It's a lovely work of art. The limbo his mind is in after leaving Carla is portrayed wonderfully. I have to admit that I had to read it twice before knowing what everything meant, but that only adds to the charm.
[spoil]Thank you heartily- I think what really helped me describe his limbo existence after murdering his girlfriend was the music I was listening to. It created s strange but enticing... envelope of sound? It's hard to explain. I really wish I could find it again.
The person at the end, the one with the "matronly voice" was his mother. I tried to say that in one word ("matronly") and didn't want to make it a focus, but at the same time I wanted people to see two things: one, that there are other people who still care about him and not all was lost, and two, that he loved Clara so much that he was willing to forsake that for a love in death.
The "bleak winter lights" were, of course, the refraction of the outside light as he drowned in the river he pushed Clara in to in his rage at her denial of his love, and thus he never finish proposing to her, which is why the ring was still in his hand. This latter part was also an analogy of his unwillingness to accept her death. There was also another one...
His right hand quivers. A trickle of blood slips down along his fingers. He opens his curled fist to see the diamond silver-gold ring cutting deeply in to his flesh.
The diamond ring set in silver-gold... This is more opinion, but I believe that diamonds are the purest of crystals, and that silver-gold looks similarly pure and simple in taste. Therefore, the ring represented not only the love he couldn't let go, but also Clara, herself, as she was dead- a corpse floating in icy water would obviously be pale and "pure" looking. The blood on his hand, well, comes from the expression "[so-and-so]'s blood is on your hands", restating that he killed her, but without directly saying so to the reader.
There are many others, some that I cut out because they didn't "feel" right when I read them, but I have to get ready for school for today.[/spoil]
The ending is also cool. The mixture between an open and closed ending is enticing.
[spoil]Exactly! Drowning and death are obvious signs of the end (and drowning is also a good tool for creating tension, which I tried to build in the end in numerous ways, not the least of which was many characters all speaking at once- his mind, himself, Clara, the police, and his mother), but marriage- when he finally gave her the ring- is a symbol of a new journey begun. It could also be said that we don't know if the "rest" was absolute- maybe after this he was brought back to consciousness by a rescue team, only to live on in a misery he could never outrun- maybe living with a sickness for the rest of his life as a metaphor of his immersion in to death with Clara but his escape of the same fate he forced on her in some way (I didn't word that the best). You could also say that there are multiple characters that could also have their stories told.[/spoil]
I'm going to start on The Veiling now.
I would treasure that beyond words :*)