Adflict, Lord of Torment

[The_Engineer]

Originally Posted by Number1SuperGuy

Thank you for reading and reviewing! Chapter length is something I've been fighting with myself over, but after 2 comments about the 2nd chapter being too short I think I've gotten my answer. As for Adflict's entrance I found it to be very flashy and dramatic! And he DID have an entourage, it was a pretty small line in the first chapter, but I'll quote it real fast "As he spoke, all varieties of nightmarish demons started cascading forth from the crimson-lightning maelstrom, some so large they had to squat their bodies to fit through the giant portal."

Anywho, I've often thought about going back and adding more detail to the story cuz I really like the characters I've created... but my thinking is that it would take a long time to add in all the details I want (details like character descriptions of Jenna, Jennice, and Lerrick, their homestead, also descriptions of the monsters that followed Adflict out of the portal), and right now I'm just writing a quick story because it's fun. Maybe once the story is finished I'll go back and refine it, but for now it's all in good fun.

P.S. The story never actually said Jenna died

Ah, I must have overlooked the entourage in my haste to read the riveting chapter . No honestly, you've stumbled onto a good thing. I had to look long and hard for things that didn't quite go with me, and even then it was hard to find things I didn't agree with. Chapter length is always a good thing, as every chapter should always advance the storyline. Really though, keep it up!

I might have to write my own fan fic, it seems like fun.

[dorgeismydog]

Nice, really enjoyable actually, first time ive ever read a post longer than a page, and a whole page is rare anymore comming?