You're too defensive for poetry. I was being critical cause if I was writing a poem I would want people to point out anything that might not make sense. And I'm not saying it has to make perfect sense, but if there is something not working with the structure and order of things I might simply reevaluate how I've presented it. But your way is better. Next time someone doesn't get what I'm saying, I'll just assume it's all their fault and that they lack imagination. I'll then refer them to a book of some kind.
And that's what I thought you meant and I had to make sure. And I don't picture flower petals dashing to the ground because they're flower petals. And it feels like you threw in gasping in there for no reason at all. And what's gasping exactly? The raindrops? The petals?
Dashed sounds a lot better than "made their way quickly," in my opinion, but to each his own, I guess. Conveys the same general meaning but in only one word, and it's more dramatic.
I like how you conclude that because I didn't like the word dashed that I was suggesting you actually use "made their way quickly". I said THAT because I was making sure that by dash you meant to go quickly. You know, as opposed to a dash of salt? Like I'd tell you what word or phrase to use instead.
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Petals dashed to the ground? Dash as in quickly? They quickly made their way to the ground. Just awful. Do I get to choose which candy?
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