So, I don't consider myself a writer, as most times I can not even formulate complete sentences, most of the time my speech consists of grunts and indistinguishable words that only I know the meaning to, at least thats how my wife describes it. Anyways pick this apart for me and tell me if I should keep it going, or go back to my day job. Thanks everyone!!
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I do like your descriptive approach, although you use several cliches ("death and decay"--try to describe the seen with your own words, not words used in the same sequence by countless writers before you). You have a good vocabulary but poor attention to spelling. In many instances, your constructs make little sense to me ("Scraping, and then a shadow.."--"Scraping" is a sound, so I'm expecting some other element of the senses to be highlighted in "and then a shadow"). It could be that I just lack creativity or literary understanding, I don't know.
Regardless of all of that, what is the significance of the labyrinth? Does it echo some inner, personal shortcoming, some challenge of character that will force he/she to emerge from the end as a new and better person? Who is the character? At this point, I just see a lot of pretty description and not much else. Is this confrontation the climax of your story? Because of these questions, I don't think I can say yea or nay at your continuity of this project. There doesn't seem to be anything to continue.
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I do like your descriptive approach, although you use several cliches ("death and decay"--try to describe the seen with your own words, not words used in the same sequence by countless writers before you). You have a good vocabulary but poor attention to spelling. In many instances, your constructs make little sense to me ("Scraping, and then a shadow.."--"Scraping" is a sound, so I'm expecting some other element of the senses to be highlighted in "and then a shadow"). It could be that I just lack creativity or literary understanding, I don't know.
Regardless of all of that, what is the significance of the labyrinth? Does it echo some inner, personal shortcoming, some challenge of character that will force he/she to emerge from the end as a new and better person? Who is the character? At this point, I just see a lot of pretty description and not much else. Is this confrontation the climax of your story? Because of these questions, I don't think I can say yea or nay at your continuity of this project. There doesn't seem to be anything to continue.